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ceuSo, before it was submitted/published, I think this story was the longest I'd ever written... I wrote it back in March, so yeah, I'm pretty sure it was XD (Miss A, Alice in Wonderland AU, Jia/Min.) It's about the most difficult thing I ever wrote.
SOOOOOOOOOOOO actually the idea stemmed back in mid January when I was like, WHAT AM I GOING TO WRITE FOR KPOP OLYMFICS I WANT TO WRITE SOMETHING LONG AND AWESOME. and generally most of my long stories are pretty awesome (if I do say so myself.) Anyways, I was stressing over it while chilling on my laptop in my family room, and cruising through Netflix just because. And I came across Alice in Wonderland and a bunch of Alice in Wonderland movies and I was like, OOOH THAT'D BE INTERESTING I SHOULD WRITE A SUPER JUNIOR ALICE IN WONDERLAND STORY- oh wait.
Thus the idea of this story was born.
and it's totally better than a Super Junior one because there are GIRLS and GIRLS are AWESOME. FUCK YEAH.
+ one of the prompts from olymfics was "the world is a crazy place" which totally fit Alice In Wonderland and I was like YEAH. there are parts of High High in the story, though (up in the sky, touch the sky, etc. haha I am lame). and the other supplementary prompt fits with the actual theme/moral ish sorta of the story XD /dork
so, the first scene (where Jia's playing tag with Fei and Suzy) gave me so much trouble. I originally wrote a ~15000 word draft and it was while I was on writer's block, AND I wrote the whole thing longhand and it was awful, omg. first scene was so much trouble because the wording is weird and it's just PRESENT TENSE IN YO FACE which is one of the things that annoys me most when people use present tense. anyways, it's also really embarrassing because I had no idea what their dialogue would be when I initially wrote it, so it's sorta, uh, >.> I did outline this story this way, though, them playing tag in a really sunny, happy field type thing~
speaking of outline, this is probably the 23o498820398478th fic I've outlined on my phone. what can I say, I like making drafts on my phone >___>; it took me about two or three hours to outline - I was done at about 1:30am sometime in February, with 14 500-character drafts lol oTL; yup, outlined every single scene. also, I reoutlined it in my notebook and wanted more Alice in Wonderland references, so I ended up checking out Alice in Wonderland/Through The Looking Glass from my school library and rereading it XD
half the reason why I used Jia as ~Alice was because of the whole blond thing she had going on, ngl. though the other reason is because I feel like she'd make a better main character than Min - and I wanted to write a Jia/Min, since they're my OTP - and I know their characterizations in this story are totally not how they are ~canon, but I like alternating and taking a dark turn on things, huhuhu...
I use too many ellipses in this story oTL the way I wanted to originally stylize the "... and then she's falling..." is like, make it diagonal from the text/paragraphs, but then I felt like that'd be really obnoxious XD
so anyways, this draft was written about two weeks after I wrote the shitty 15000 word draft, decided that it was shitty beyond repair (even though it saw two betas, and I actually looked it over myself. I wrote all over my paper, YOU HAVE NO IDEA. actually one of them was written over so much that I just wrote the scene, and that's what made me decide to rewrite the whole story entirely) and then just typed it on Google Docs without abandon. it worked a lot better, because it sorta tugged me out of the dark abyss of writer's block I was in, just got me focused on writing \o/
I really like the scene where Jia meets Min for the first time--I dunno, it's like, Min is her introduction to Wonderland (er, minus the White Rabbit) and it's like, she disappears and then comes back and Idk, it's pretty cool to me /8Db also, the sort of little thing where the creatures of Wonderland are like YOU DON'T BELONG HERE is supposed to be a contrast to AIW, where everyone was like, "Alice! Alice!" or just sorta ignoring. I wanted it to be like a ~dark story~ even though AIW is only just Lewis Carroll on like, drugs or something (which is where the other part of this story came from. I mean, High High was my song prompt for kpop_olymfics which DID make me think of drugs and Wonderland is a crazy ass place, you know?)
uh yeah, anyways, with the whole forest being ~scared of her, it was supposed to be like the thing with the rabbit--she's basically an alien in their world. and lol, I created some really lame things of my own to insert into Wonderland, like the bullfrog XD /shot um, lol, a lot of people said that the introduction to Wonderland was very Alice In Wonderland-y and very, well, canon I guess you would call it? but I really wanted it to contrast the (dark) view of Wonderland Jia gets later, haha... I also wanted to slide in most of the references early on into the story so that later is just focused on the relationship between Jia and Min :D ♥ (not gonna lie, the Tweedledum and Tweedledee part was the most annoying thing to write. also, I didn't know their names were in the Google Chrome dictionary.)
THIS WAS THE STRANGEST THING FOR ME TO INSERT INTO THE FIC. I read it in the book and really wanted to put it in, but didn't want a scene where Jia finds them in the house so I just slipped it in... and it's probably really confusing for anyone who hasn't read the book XD Actually, Wonderland is just confusing in general orz;; I really took loads of liberties with the AU and made sure that everything didn't make sense, because that made sense, that nothing makes sense. it was fantastic to work with but I feel like I had just bs'd everything--which I didn't, by the way XD
I like the Cheshire Cat in this story. well, I like the Cheshire Cat in general but it was fantastic to write him, and originally his dialogue was lame but now it's a bit more witty. xD also, the fading smile thing always creeped me out, so I made sure to include it in this~
MAD HATTER'S TEA PARTY. YAY :D ♥ love love the dormouse, except I only slipped it in in the story xD the song I made them sing was really lame (but it was lamer originally so it's okay), but it's the best way for me to introduce Min :D (yeah, I sorta discounted the dormouse as one of the people with the ~unbirthday haha) writing the Mad Hatter and the March Hare was super difficult, though, because even though they're really minor characters, I did want to keep their canon characteristics. but the fact that Min joins Jia on her journey at this point makes this scene one of my favorites (the other being the desert one, of course)
HAHA I am so lame, this actually had come to me while I was writing it. all of my puns are so lame orz;; also I was way too arsed to come up with any other witty foods based on their names, which is the reason why they eat pound cake later, too. ... Jia starts losing a bit of her memory at this point, because she's been in Wonderland in so long--as the creatures told her earlier, it's not her place to be, and when she stays in too long, she goes mad. aka, loses her memories. creepy, I know *q*
OOH, ONE THING I WANTED TO EXPLAIN. okay, like, Min and Jia can basically run really fast in the forest, right? well the forest is basically a giant chessboard--it's that way in Through The Looking Glass--and in the books, Alice and the Red Queen (whom she was friends with) traveled the same way. the reason they traveled that way was to indicate that the Queen was a Queen on the chessboard: she had a lot of power, could travel in as many directions as far as she wanted. so in the same way, Min traveled that way too, because her mother's the Red Queen but she sort of failed on the position, so it was transferred to Min, her daughter. and Min's sort of like, controlling and power-hungry in the story, so I feel like that she having the ~Queen's moves~ really works. hmm, could've been interesting if I made Jia and the White Queen connected in any way, and Jia being the other Queen xD
(oh, right, I did mention:
sort of the significance of Min kissing her on the cheek so much is to lead to the end (where they see the lipstick on Jia's face)--so it doesn't seem so random xD
doing the transition scene from the wooden shop -> wooden rowboat was so fun! when I read it in Alice in Wonderland, it seemed so weird, it was cool :O and super witty, haha. how is Lewis Carroll a genius when he's on drugs oTL
HAHAHA I am so funny.
I also really, really loved the scene when Jia and Min were lying in the bluegrass (remember what I said about me being funny?) and Jia's telling Min about her world--especially the princess part, because it contrasts with Min actually being a princess and loving it, but not telling her, because Wonderland is so illogical that it just doesn't really matter, at least on the Red Queen's land. also, sort of Peter Pan complex at this area about wanting to grow up and wanting to not grow up, but at the same time, Jia and Min have the same idea of what they want to do since the adults on the Red Queen's land are incompetent and since Min is royalty, she's sort of used to bossing people around and being the respected one, which is what Jia wants. and I'm just sorta explaining the theme of my story to deaf ears, but lol this is fun anyways XD
so Min and Jia did actually go through the desert the first time; one of the reasons why I did so many scene breaks, other than the fact that it makes it flow better and explaining everything that happens in between is annoying anyways, is so that they can do things in between and Jia won't remember them later. also, the Caterpillar is fucking CREEPY and it was so weird writing him "WHO ARE YOU" omg Caterpillar why so socially awkward. originally, the Caterpillar was supposed to be sort of enamored by Min because she could say classic rhymes correctly (it's something that was sort of a pattern in the Alice in Wonderland books--creatures would ask Alice to recite poems and rhymes, but, like Jia, Alice loses her memory and recites them incorrectly. also, Alice forgets where she comes from the same way Jia does.)
this is legit the creepiest scene I have ever written. well, maybe not have ever written, but it's pretty creepy >____>; also, I really like this line of mine:
ONTO PART II! oTL yeah I'm just reading my fic over and commentating every time I have something to commentate (I should be starting that Drarry fic I outlined, and also I signed up for merlinreversebang today--but this is completely irrelevant, sorry lol)
Min doesn't go home much, if it's not made obvious in the story--mostly what she does all day in Wonderland (and I haven't really thought this out that much, actually) is just chill and explore around. she had actually taken Jia the route to get to the castle, obviously because the forest is so massively big and it's hard to just walk straight through it, and if you think you can get to the Red Castle the other way, you can't, etc. the Cat and Min did actually lead her in the right direction, though it accomplishes nothing!
Min also gets her mother's traits! in this story lol (I am so lame) well, aside from just the flying-through-the-forest thing, but also being angry about the dudes painting the roses red, which is pretty obvious by the way she reacts. I dunno, I like writing angry people. and the age in this story is super, super vague, which is the way it should be (obviously)--Jia grows older and maturer through the story, mentally sorta and I guess her body changes? it's like, it goes from a very childish, simplistic, classical perspective of everything and Wonderland, but as the story progresses Min leads her to the different parts, Jia learns more about the place and then the part where they have sex, BAM, I mean it's not like I'm making children have sex (uh, children being 13 and younger lol).
HAHA ME.
yup, she has the potential to be the future beheader of all the land! \o/ didn't want her to have that big of a head though (HAHA ALICE IN WONDERLAND THE MOVIE REFERENCES I am so weird.) originally, in the first draft, the question was "you know what i hate?" and then the answer to be "noise" and they just chill in the silence, but it didn't really make any sense (well other than the fact that noise is chaotic and Wonderland is chaotic and Min might secretly hate it all.) plus, blood is 10x more morbid than noise lol
I actually have all of their dresses that they wear designed in my head--though actually what Min wears initially, I'm not sure. the second and third dresses they wear, I drew er sometime (but I'm really bad at drawing so lol.) and um, fashion isn't really my thing but they do wear gorgeous dresses in this story (in my mind's eye, at least), and it's sort of a testament type thing to the Alice In Wonderland movie, where ALL OF ALICE'S DRESSES WERE SO FUCKING PRETTY OMG I LOVE THEM ALL. anyways.
the explanation for the day/night thing comes almost exactly from the book (though not word for word, of course) which made me really grateful because lol, I am a logic person and it wouldn't have made sense for me otherwise. and yay breaking and entering! lol, I just really wanted Jia to turn big and then carry Min because that seems so romantic and awesome (also, can you just imagine being a giant and stomping all over the place in a huge forest omg 8D) and yeah, also romantic when they just chill in the field together ♥ also, my favorite part about writing the scene was the HTML liberties I took with it lol 8D THE LIZARD'S TEXT IS SMALL IT'S PRETTY AWESOME
the Jabberwocky is sort of the part where Jia realizes that Min is sort of morbid, really--the whole, getting chills effect while Min is completely unaffected, actually excited to see a giant maneating dragon. also, the Jabberwocky was never really in the books, just mentioned and feared mostly--but I wanted it to be in the fic because it was in the movie (which was an amazing movie, btw, if my commentary hasn't expressed it. though the end and the Mad Hatter's dance was kinda stupid) and also it adds to Min's characterization like, a lot. I also love the scene right after where they see the Jabberwocky, and Jia yells at her 'cause it's sorta... different from the other scenes. I think it's a sort of turning point, secondary climax (I love writing climaxes and arguments and all those sort of things haha) and Min is totally oblivious to her feelings, which makes it even worse. yay :D
the scene right after that was actually never outlined and never planned out and actually when I wrote this second draft first, it wasn't there in the first place! :O but I feel like there had to be some closure on the happiness of their relationship before everything started to fall apart. also, the conversation was really intriguing to write, sort of like if Jia had done things the wrong way, her relationship with Min could have lasted (though since it's mostly a dream, I'm not quite sure how that would end lol)
the White Palace area! it's loads nicer than the Red Castle because the Queen is nice and interacts with the peasants, because the peasants live on the uppertown so they have better living conditions (haha I am such a geek.) Min's really negative toward it because she likes the Red Castle, where she and her family are the only ones in charge and it's sort of everything she's used to; she doesn't like poor people and poverty and stuff around her, because they're not supposed to be on ~her level. + this is sort of not really on the topic of the castles, but one thing I disliked about my style in the fic (other than the ellipses) was the swearing. I'm not a huge swearer but I felt like it would be right if there was swearing, so it feels very awkward for me when I read it but don't know how to change it :<
anyways--canon appearances! The White Queen, the Lion and the Unicorn (I actually had to do some research on that), Humpty Dumpty. also, croquet, the other thing that Min inherits from her mother, the love of croquet xD (I actually have croquet sticks here at home). don't think I need to explain the scene, because I think it's pretty obvious enough with the whole adult/child roles and stuff, yeah~
HOW IS A RAVEN LIKE A WRITING DESK? (because Poe wrote on both? they can both produce notes, however flat they may be? they are nevar put with the wrong end in front? kekeke)
um, the crazy psycho Jia-yelling-at-Min scene is actually my favorite (though writing it first longhand was a bitch). when I first outlined it on my phone, I started just writing out what Jia was thinking about, and then ended up writing basically a summary of what she said, Min's reactions, what Jia said next, etc. because my brain was on a roll and basically this is my favorite thing of dialogue I've ever written, ever. well, mostly with the plot, but when I started typing it, I was so scared that I'd screw it up but eventually I polished it and I'm really satisfied with the way it turned out. and then the thing with Min leading her out of the desert and Jia saying that she wanted to go home--you'd think that Min would say, "You are home" but even Min knew that this wasn't where Jia belonged but she still wanted Jia to stay. the whole yelling at each other while running--I wrote basically all of that too on my phone (lol orz;;) though I used the capslock because yelling is a lot less formidable when it's just in lowercase, haha xD
the running through the mirror is a testament to "through the looking glass", actually, though Jia doesn't phase through like Alice had, she actually runs right into the mirror and crashes out of it into the world beyond.... kekeke
THE LAST SCENE, okay I was so scared I would screw it up too. because seriously (oh my god I actually wrote siriusly there originally by accident oTL WHAT IS WITH ME TODAY) I really like the ending, myself, because it's pretty clever (hahahaha me and my modesty.) but I was so, so scared I would write it awfully and get the wording wrong and have the style butchered and just not make it work, but the last line--I think the last line is one of the only lines I wrote in the original/first draft version and kept in this. I really do like it, and this fic, immensely no matter how much trouble it gave me and the ellipses (which I abused, geez.)
had the hugest trouble finding a title for this story, but I really like it now. High Hopes in Velvet Ropes actually fits this story a lot--actually, I found a lot of songs that could fit this story well but HHVR is the title, and I like it best, so :'D
ALSO WHO WROTE THAT AMAZINGLY FLATTERING SDLFKJLKJ TOO AWESOME COMMENT ABOUT THIS FIC ON THAT ANON MEME orz;; thank you so much, whoever you are anon for being super super nice and I'm pretty sure it's someone on my flist or was on my team because that's the only way you knew who I was, hahahah ♥♥♥
SOOOOOOOOOOOO actually the idea stemmed back in mid January when I was like, WHAT AM I GOING TO WRITE FOR KPOP OLYMFICS I WANT TO WRITE SOMETHING LONG AND AWESOME. and generally most of my long stories are pretty awesome (if I do say so myself.) Anyways, I was stressing over it while chilling on my laptop in my family room, and cruising through Netflix just because. And I came across Alice in Wonderland and a bunch of Alice in Wonderland movies and I was like, OOOH THAT'D BE INTERESTING I SHOULD WRITE A SUPER JUNIOR ALICE IN WONDERLAND STORY- oh wait.
Thus the idea of this story was born.
and it's totally better than a Super Junior one because there are GIRLS and GIRLS are AWESOME. FUCK YEAH.
+ one of the prompts from olymfics was "the world is a crazy place" which totally fit Alice In Wonderland and I was like YEAH. there are parts of High High in the story, though (up in the sky, touch the sky, etc. haha I am lame). and the other supplementary prompt fits with the actual theme/moral ish sorta of the story XD /dork
so, the first scene (where Jia's playing tag with Fei and Suzy) gave me so much trouble. I originally wrote a ~15000 word draft and it was while I was on writer's block, AND I wrote the whole thing longhand and it was awful, omg. first scene was so much trouble because the wording is weird and it's just PRESENT TENSE IN YO FACE which is one of the things that annoys me most when people use present tense. anyways, it's also really embarrassing because I had no idea what their dialogue would be when I initially wrote it, so it's sorta, uh, >.> I did outline this story this way, though, them playing tag in a really sunny, happy field type thing~
speaking of outline, this is probably the 23o498820398478th fic I've outlined on my phone. what can I say, I like making drafts on my phone >___>; it took me about two or three hours to outline - I was done at about 1:30am sometime in February, with 14 500-character drafts lol oTL; yup, outlined every single scene. also, I reoutlined it in my notebook and wanted more Alice in Wonderland references, so I ended up checking out Alice in Wonderland/Through The Looking Glass from my school library and rereading it XD
half the reason why I used Jia as ~Alice was because of the whole blond thing she had going on, ngl. though the other reason is because I feel like she'd make a better main character than Min - and I wanted to write a Jia/Min, since they're my OTP - and I know their characterizations in this story are totally not how they are ~canon, but I like alternating and taking a dark turn on things, huhuhu...
I use too many ellipses in this story oTL the way I wanted to originally stylize the "... and then she's falling..." is like, make it diagonal from the text/paragraphs, but then I felt like that'd be really obnoxious XD
so anyways, this draft was written about two weeks after I wrote the shitty 15000 word draft, decided that it was shitty beyond repair (even though it saw two betas, and I actually looked it over myself. I wrote all over my paper, YOU HAVE NO IDEA. actually one of them was written over so much that I just wrote the scene, and that's what made me decide to rewrite the whole story entirely) and then just typed it on Google Docs without abandon. it worked a lot better, because it sorta tugged me out of the dark abyss of writer's block I was in, just got me focused on writing \o/
I really like the scene where Jia meets Min for the first time--I dunno, it's like, Min is her introduction to Wonderland (er, minus the White Rabbit) and it's like, she disappears and then comes back and Idk, it's pretty cool to me /8Db also, the sort of little thing where the creatures of Wonderland are like YOU DON'T BELONG HERE is supposed to be a contrast to AIW, where everyone was like, "Alice! Alice!" or just sorta ignoring. I wanted it to be like a ~dark story~ even though AIW is only just Lewis Carroll on like, drugs or something (which is where the other part of this story came from. I mean, High High was my song prompt for kpop_olymfics which DID make me think of drugs and Wonderland is a crazy ass place, you know?)
uh yeah, anyways, with the whole forest being ~scared of her, it was supposed to be like the thing with the rabbit--she's basically an alien in their world. and lol, I created some really lame things of my own to insert into Wonderland, like the bullfrog XD /shot um, lol, a lot of people said that the introduction to Wonderland was very Alice In Wonderland-y and very, well, canon I guess you would call it? but I really wanted it to contrast the (dark) view of Wonderland Jia gets later, haha... I also wanted to slide in most of the references early on into the story so that later is just focused on the relationship between Jia and Min :D ♥ (not gonna lie, the Tweedledum and Tweedledee part was the most annoying thing to write. also, I didn't know their names were in the Google Chrome dictionary.)
And after seeing a large old woman chase after a baby, and then seeing the baby turn into a pig, Jia knows that she should probably stop before she loses her head.
THIS WAS THE STRANGEST THING FOR ME TO INSERT INTO THE FIC. I read it in the book and really wanted to put it in, but didn't want a scene where Jia finds them in the house so I just slipped it in... and it's probably really confusing for anyone who hasn't read the book XD Actually, Wonderland is just confusing in general orz;; I really took loads of liberties with the AU and made sure that everything didn't make sense, because that made sense, that nothing makes sense. it was fantastic to work with but I feel like I had just bs'd everything--which I didn't, by the way XD
I like the Cheshire Cat in this story. well, I like the Cheshire Cat in general but it was fantastic to write him, and originally his dialogue was lame but now it's a bit more witty. xD also, the fading smile thing always creeped me out, so I made sure to include it in this~
MAD HATTER'S TEA PARTY. YAY :D ♥ love love the dormouse, except I only slipped it in in the story xD the song I made them sing was really lame (but it was lamer originally so it's okay), but it's the best way for me to introduce Min :D (yeah, I sorta discounted the dormouse as one of the people with the ~unbirthday haha) writing the Mad Hatter and the March Hare was super difficult, though, because even though they're really minor characters, I did want to keep their canon characteristics. but the fact that Min joins Jia on her journey at this point makes this scene one of my favorites (the other being the desert one, of course)
"Rich in wealth!"
"Rich in power!"
"Rich in character!"
"Rich in taste!"
HAHA I am so lame, this actually had come to me while I was writing it. all of my puns are so lame orz;; also I was way too arsed to come up with any other witty foods based on their names, which is the reason why they eat pound cake later, too. ... Jia starts losing a bit of her memory at this point, because she's been in Wonderland in so long--as the creatures told her earlier, it's not her place to be, and when she stays in too long, she goes mad. aka, loses her memories. creepy, I know *q*
OOH, ONE THING I WANTED TO EXPLAIN. okay, like, Min and Jia can basically run really fast in the forest, right? well the forest is basically a giant chessboard--it's that way in Through The Looking Glass--and in the books, Alice and the Red Queen (whom she was friends with) traveled the same way. the reason they traveled that way was to indicate that the Queen was a Queen on the chessboard: she had a lot of power, could travel in as many directions as far as she wanted. so in the same way, Min traveled that way too, because her mother's the Red Queen but she sort of failed on the position, so it was transferred to Min, her daughter. and Min's sort of like, controlling and power-hungry in the story, so I feel like that she having the ~Queen's moves~ really works. hmm, could've been interesting if I made Jia and the White Queen connected in any way, and Jia being the other Queen xD
(oh, right, I did mention:
"Wasn't that fun?" Min beams. "Got it from Mother. Pity she can't do it anymore, though.")
sort of the significance of Min kissing her on the cheek so much is to lead to the end (where they see the lipstick on Jia's face)--so it doesn't seem so random xD
doing the transition scene from the wooden shop -> wooden rowboat was so fun! when I read it in Alice in Wonderland, it seemed so weird, it was cool :O and super witty, haha. how is Lewis Carroll a genius when he's on drugs oTL
"Here," she says, sticking her hand out to Jia.
Jia eyes the fruit warily.
"Oh come on," Min laughs. "It's just a pine apple."
"It doesn't... look like one," says Jia.
"Does your world have pine apples?"
HAHAHA I am so funny.
I also really, really loved the scene when Jia and Min were lying in the bluegrass (remember what I said about me being funny?) and Jia's telling Min about her world--especially the princess part, because it contrasts with Min actually being a princess and loving it, but not telling her, because Wonderland is so illogical that it just doesn't really matter, at least on the Red Queen's land. also, sort of Peter Pan complex at this area about wanting to grow up and wanting to not grow up, but at the same time, Jia and Min have the same idea of what they want to do since the adults on the Red Queen's land are incompetent and since Min is royalty, she's sort of used to bossing people around and being the respected one, which is what Jia wants. and I'm just sorta explaining the theme of my story to deaf ears, but lol this is fun anyways XD
Jia opens her eyes and gasps in amazement. The trees are all towering above them, shadows cast as far as they can see. The leaves are as large as they are, scattered, barely reaching the top of their heads. The ground is more vast than ever, and the stump-like mushroom a few centimeters away now looks like a stool of some sort.(The first time I wrote this--the original shitty draft, this description gave me so much trouble, you have no idea oTL;;)
"I think we should go that way," says Min, tapping her chin and not noticing Jia. She points between a couple of trees a few meters away. "Yeah. Carriage... desert... castle. Let's go!"
so Min and Jia did actually go through the desert the first time; one of the reasons why I did so many scene breaks, other than the fact that it makes it flow better and explaining everything that happens in between is annoying anyways, is so that they can do things in between and Jia won't remember them later. also, the Caterpillar is fucking CREEPY and it was so weird writing him "WHO ARE YOU" omg Caterpillar why so socially awkward. originally, the Caterpillar was supposed to be sort of enamored by Min because she could say classic rhymes correctly (it's something that was sort of a pattern in the Alice in Wonderland books--creatures would ask Alice to recite poems and rhymes, but, like Jia, Alice loses her memory and recites them incorrectly. also, Alice forgets where she comes from the same way Jia does.)
"What happened to your rabbit?" says Jia.
Min glances to her while stepping over a tree root. "What rabbit?"
"You know. The white one."
"What the hell are you talking about?" says Min, staring at her.
"The white rabbit! You said he was your pet!" Jia says exasperatedly.
Min frowns. "When was this?"
"When- When I first came here! When we first met!" says Jia. "I fell in a hole and I saw a rabbit, and then you came out of nowhere and said he was your pet and then you walked away, and—"
"I told you you were crazy," Min says cheekily, kissing Jia again. "Now come on! We're almost there!"
this is legit the creepiest scene I have ever written. well, maybe not have ever written, but it's pretty creepy >____>; also, I really like this line of mine:
It feels like something magical, something unreal.
ONTO PART II! oTL yeah I'm just reading my fic over and commentating every time I have something to commentate (I should be starting that Drarry fic I outlined, and also I signed up for merlinreversebang today--but this is completely irrelevant, sorry lol)
Min doesn't go home much, if it's not made obvious in the story--mostly what she does all day in Wonderland (and I haven't really thought this out that much, actually) is just chill and explore around. she had actually taken Jia the route to get to the castle, obviously because the forest is so massively big and it's hard to just walk straight through it, and if you think you can get to the Red Castle the other way, you can't, etc. the Cat and Min did actually lead her in the right direction, though it accomplishes nothing!
Min also gets her mother's traits! in this story lol (I am so lame) well, aside from just the flying-through-the-forest thing, but also being angry about the dudes painting the roses red, which is pretty obvious by the way she reacts. I dunno, I like writing angry people. and the age in this story is super, super vague, which is the way it should be (obviously)--Jia grows older and maturer through the story, mentally sorta and I guess her body changes? it's like, it goes from a very childish, simplistic, classical perspective of everything and Wonderland, but as the story progresses Min leads her to the different parts, Jia learns more about the place and then the part where they have sex, BAM, I mean it's not like I'm making children have sex (uh, children being 13 and younger lol).
"Ugh, that damned knave probably stole the tarts again"
HAHA ME.
"You know what I love?" says Min in a hushed voice.
Jia shakes her head.
"Blood."
yup, she has the potential to be the future beheader of all the land! \o/ didn't want her to have that big of a head though (HAHA ALICE IN WONDERLAND THE MOVIE REFERENCES I am so weird.) originally, in the first draft, the question was "you know what i hate?" and then the answer to be "noise" and they just chill in the silence, but it didn't really make any sense (well other than the fact that noise is chaotic and Wonderland is chaotic and Min might secretly hate it all.) plus, blood is 10x more morbid than noise lol
I actually have all of their dresses that they wear designed in my head--though actually what Min wears initially, I'm not sure. the second and third dresses they wear, I drew er sometime (but I'm really bad at drawing so lol.) and um, fashion isn't really my thing but they do wear gorgeous dresses in this story (in my mind's eye, at least), and it's sort of a testament type thing to the Alice In Wonderland movie, where ALL OF ALICE'S DRESSES WERE SO FUCKING PRETTY OMG I LOVE THEM ALL. anyways.
the explanation for the day/night thing comes almost exactly from the book (though not word for word, of course) which made me really grateful because lol, I am a logic person and it wouldn't have made sense for me otherwise. and yay breaking and entering! lol, I just really wanted Jia to turn big and then carry Min because that seems so romantic and awesome (also, can you just imagine being a giant and stomping all over the place in a huge forest omg 8D) and yeah, also romantic when they just chill in the field together ♥ also, my favorite part about writing the scene was the HTML liberties I took with it lol 8D THE LIZARD'S TEXT IS SMALL IT'S PRETTY AWESOME
the Jabberwocky is sort of the part where Jia realizes that Min is sort of morbid, really--the whole, getting chills effect while Min is completely unaffected, actually excited to see a giant maneating dragon. also, the Jabberwocky was never really in the books, just mentioned and feared mostly--but I wanted it to be in the fic because it was in the movie (which was an amazing movie, btw, if my commentary hasn't expressed it. though the end and the Mad Hatter's dance was kinda stupid) and also it adds to Min's characterization like, a lot. I also love the scene right after where they see the Jabberwocky, and Jia yells at her 'cause it's sorta... different from the other scenes. I think it's a sort of turning point, secondary climax (I love writing climaxes and arguments and all those sort of things haha) and Min is totally oblivious to her feelings, which makes it even worse. yay :D
the scene right after that was actually never outlined and never planned out and actually when I wrote this second draft first, it wasn't there in the first place! :O but I feel like there had to be some closure on the happiness of their relationship before everything started to fall apart. also, the conversation was really intriguing to write, sort of like if Jia had done things the wrong way, her relationship with Min could have lasted (though since it's mostly a dream, I'm not quite sure how that would end lol)
the White Palace area! it's loads nicer than the Red Castle because the Queen is nice and interacts with the peasants, because the peasants live on the uppertown so they have better living conditions (haha I am such a geek.) Min's really negative toward it because she likes the Red Castle, where she and her family are the only ones in charge and it's sort of everything she's used to; she doesn't like poor people and poverty and stuff around her, because they're not supposed to be on ~her level. + this is sort of not really on the topic of the castles, but one thing I disliked about my style in the fic (other than the ellipses) was the swearing. I'm not a huge swearer but I felt like it would be right if there was swearing, so it feels very awkward for me when I read it but don't know how to change it :<
anyways--canon appearances! The White Queen, the Lion and the Unicorn (I actually had to do some research on that), Humpty Dumpty. also, croquet, the other thing that Min inherits from her mother, the love of croquet xD (I actually have croquet sticks here at home). don't think I need to explain the scene, because I think it's pretty obvious enough with the whole adult/child roles and stuff, yeah~
HOW IS A RAVEN LIKE A WRITING DESK? (because Poe wrote on both? they can both produce notes, however flat they may be? they are nevar put with the wrong end in front? kekeke)
um, the crazy psycho Jia-yelling-at-Min scene is actually my favorite (though writing it first longhand was a bitch). when I first outlined it on my phone, I started just writing out what Jia was thinking about, and then ended up writing basically a summary of what she said, Min's reactions, what Jia said next, etc. because my brain was on a roll and basically this is my favorite thing of dialogue I've ever written, ever. well, mostly with the plot, but when I started typing it, I was so scared that I'd screw it up but eventually I polished it and I'm really satisfied with the way it turned out. and then the thing with Min leading her out of the desert and Jia saying that she wanted to go home--you'd think that Min would say, "You are home" but even Min knew that this wasn't where Jia belonged but she still wanted Jia to stay. the whole yelling at each other while running--I wrote basically all of that too on my phone (lol orz;;) though I used the capslock because yelling is a lot less formidable when it's just in lowercase, haha xD
the running through the mirror is a testament to "through the looking glass", actually, though Jia doesn't phase through like Alice had, she actually runs right into the mirror and crashes out of it into the world beyond.... kekeke
THE LAST SCENE, okay I was so scared I would screw it up too. because seriously (oh my god I actually wrote siriusly there originally by accident oTL WHAT IS WITH ME TODAY) I really like the ending, myself, because it's pretty clever (hahahaha me and my modesty.) but I was so, so scared I would write it awfully and get the wording wrong and have the style butchered and just not make it work, but the last line--I think the last line is one of the only lines I wrote in the original/first draft version and kept in this. I really do like it, and this fic, immensely no matter how much trouble it gave me and the ellipses (which I abused, geez.)
had the hugest trouble finding a title for this story, but I really like it now. High Hopes in Velvet Ropes actually fits this story a lot--actually, I found a lot of songs that could fit this story well but HHVR is the title, and I like it best, so :'D
ALSO WHO WROTE THAT AMAZINGLY FLATTERING SDLFKJLKJ TOO AWESOME COMMENT ABOUT THIS FIC ON THAT ANON MEME orz;; thank you so much, whoever you are anon for being super super nice and I'm pretty sure it's someone on my flist or was on my team because that's the only way you knew who I was, hahahah ♥♥♥
